Wednesday, 13 August 2014

Bobs bear

Walt.Show not tell to describe and expand on one feature of our character.

Bob had no hair he was extremely bald.  He only had a big beard that he never ever brush even if you begged he wouldn't brush it because every time he tried the brush would get stuck and he already had ten brushes in it.He even had last nights food in it.He didn't think it even matter if he didn't brush it.

Friday, 8 August 2014

My scary show don,t tell

WALT show not tell in our writing

In the misty forest she saw old trees  She could hear people laughing ha ha ha. Then she saw a blood trail that leaded to a cave. She saw a blood river then she looked around and saw dead bodies hanging in the trees she was wondering if she was next, she felt something on her neck suddenly ….  

My show don't tell

WALT show not tell in our writing
Last week we did show don't tell with Miss smith to make our witting better can you guess what emotion I am feeling.

Her legs were shaking.  Her heart was pounding like it was going to explode  She was biting all her finger nails off.Then she heard someone laughing ha ha ha.Her knees were knocking together there was shadows circling her she felt like a ice block then she felt something on her solder suddenly....